Down on my surface
I felt a moment of sharp pleasure
I watched the blood cascade…
I did it…don’t know why…
I wanted to drown in tranquility
Detonate into darkness
Perish….
But feeble shivers down my spine
Enchanted by the pervading blood…
Let out a scream….
I gazed at the trail of immaculate red…
Going down my wrist…
Wetting my Bed
The Journey seems endless…
I am confused…
I can still see myself
Drenched…
My eyes are sinking into tears
My heartbeats retard with fear…..
My spirits float high..
Higher than the sky....
& Then....I heard...
Surprise!! Surprise!!!!
My Vicious Fate whispered..
You are not Dead…
I felt a moment of sharp pleasure
I watched the blood cascade…
I did it…don’t know why…
I wanted to drown in tranquility
Detonate into darkness
Perish….
But feeble shivers down my spine
Enchanted by the pervading blood…
Let out a scream….
I gazed at the trail of immaculate red…
Going down my wrist…
Wetting my Bed
The Journey seems endless…
I am confused…
I can still see myself
Drenched…
My eyes are sinking into tears
My heartbeats retard with fear…..
My spirits float high..
Higher than the sky....
& Then....I heard...
Surprise!! Surprise!!!!
My Vicious Fate whispered..
You are not Dead…
CCK
Ps- The picture displayed is from pinterest.
5 comments:
Hi preeti,
Congrats for coming out with yet another striking post. It surely is not abstract. An abstract work has limitations according to me. Take for example M.F. Hussain's paintings. ( I can not understand 95% of his works. Thats secondaty ) A person is compelled to take the work in the manner the artist directs its viewers to. If not It may lead to vast misunderstandings. But a poetry is open for interpretations. A reader is free to take it as he would interpret it. So its universal.
I'm not a critic nor a writer. Hope I have made myself clear.
Keep writing.
Truly insightful...
Feels raw, written without a second thought. Refreshing change from your previous 'greats'.
The way the poem has been written is very appealing.I read it twice not because I didn't understand but that both the time I found different man behind those words.The first time gave me a disgusted feeling towards the person who uttered those line but the second time made me think if he was the victim.I know that if I read it again ill come up with another view.This is the talent of a poet and a painter.They convey art and leave the retrospection to its reader and viewer respectively.
-Keep Smiling
-Madhu
really touching......loved every word......
Thank you so much :)
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